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« Reply #2 on: November 29, 2007, 06:00:44 PM » |
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Wow! That's a lot of improvement from the last one.  That's great! Okay, now for a few things to point out. The finger that's holding onto the card is just a tad too long. Shorten each section of the finger just by a bit. Also, as for elbows, the bone of the elbow is just a straight bone, so it should show up more at the center of the top part of the arm (the arm with the hand). Her right breast should hang a little higher or go against her left. That's how it would work for her, anyways.  Push her chin slightly forward, too.  |
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« Reply #3 on: December 02, 2007, 11:38:56 PM » |
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Well I was only able to improve the drawing with your comments/tips.  Which I was really glad that someone took the time to do. I'm gonna try and fix Sheena again later with your new comments when I can get to it. I did this one as a shading test and was bored at the same time. I thought it came out pretty well. http://aznswordmaster1.deviantart.com/art/Some-random-dude-71249558 |
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« Reply #5 on: December 18, 2007, 12:21:29 PM » |
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That looks awesome! I can't wait to see what the finished product will look like! As for feedback: Hector looks pretty good, but Eliwood should have slightly wider shoulders. He looks a little wimpy... errrr... wimpier than usual...! Also, Lyn's hips need to be a little wider and shapelier. I'm noticing that as you progress down the page, your lines become narrower. Just out of curiosity, do you draw while lying down? If so, make sure to draw at a desk so that your arm get's the right leverage and you can see all parts of the picture at equal distance. Good work! |
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« Reply #6 on: December 18, 2007, 06:27:45 PM » |
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Just out of curiosity, do you draw while lying down? If so, make sure to draw at a desk so that your arm get's the right leverage and you can see all parts of the picture at equal distance.
I think I might of just had it on my lap when I was drawing it, didn't have a table around so that sucked. Ok so I'll fix those up and post it as soon as I can. |
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« Reply #11 on: February 06, 2008, 12:26:21 PM » |
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Hey! Thanks alot man, this is nicely done! I appreciate it. |
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« Reply #12 on: February 12, 2008, 10:35:21 PM » |
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Geez I feel like I'm left being hanging or something. So this is a concept art like thing on the Final Fantasy thing that I did before. http://aznswordmaster1.deviantart.com/art/Lee-Final-Fantasy-concept-idea-77252969Read the description on this one if you want, its kinda long. http://aznswordmaster1.deviantart.com/art/Yamoto-77252837Yeah so thats it for now, I just need to color some stuff I wanted to color and I might get those in soon. I seriously ask that if you are looking through my stuff that I get feedback on them through here or on the Deviant art page(s) that I post, cause I feel like I'm not getting much better and I can't see my own mistakes that I can improve on unless someone points them out. |
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« Reply #15 on: April 15, 2008, 08:21:04 PM » |
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Man its sure dusty here. I'll just post something that I thought came out good compared to my other stuff in my devart. Alright so, long story short, I got carried away and got really detailed on the Final Fantasy XIII Versus main character, and I did it on notebook paper which I regret you can say.  http://aznswordmaster1.deviantart.com/art/Final-Fantasy-XIIIVersus-thing-82978338So fire comments away. |
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« Reply #16 on: April 16, 2008, 07:33:57 PM » |
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Commented on your DA page. But, yeah, I agree. This place does not hold much motivation. :\ |
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« Reply #18 on: May 13, 2008, 07:36:56 PM » |
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I'll try to come here more often. Now that my AP art portfolio is finally all done, I have more time.  Anyways, I commented on all of them. I still have to correct the one you drew randomly. :O (I would just critique right here and now, but I think this one needs some pointing out with some actual visual-ness. Boy do I not make sense. ) |
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« Reply #19 on: May 13, 2008, 08:21:45 PM » |
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Doing all the commenting on DA works for me, its more or less for FESSers that don't keep up with my stuff and stuff that I do want to show fellow FESSers.  I do get what you mean by "actual visual-ness" Like I said before, you can take your time with that, I'm in no hurry. |
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